Final Exam

     English 1301 was helpful course. I learn many different types of essay, from the description, compare and contrast, division-classification, definition, process analyze,  to research argument essay. I learn many strategy we can use in different essay from different approach. Such as description essay, we can start with personal story or something relate to the thesis of the paper. With the description essay, we need to add many vivid information, like how it small, what it look like, what it taste like, or the sound . I also learn the four different type of newspeek and write a paper about how wild spread they are in the ad and our everyday life.
    I like the peer review the most in the course. Even thought I did not like to do it at first, it does help. It gave me the chance to see how other people view the paper. Everyone have different point of view. It also gave me some idea about what could I add or expend the paper a bit and what is not working and I should delete it. From the peer review sheet, I can also know if my organization is working or not. Even though some peer reviewer does not really take their responsibility and was not giving any suggestion, I can still know where can I improve the paper a little according to the peer review paper. It work like a check list for me.
    The last, research argument paper was my least favorite. All the prior essay had topics to choose. I might not like all of them, but I know where to start right a way. With the last essay, we can write whatever topic we want that is controversy. There are plenty of the topic out there and I was not sure what should I pick. After I finally make my choice, I realize most of the source state pretty much the same thing. I had hard time to make it to six pages.
    I am proud of my process analyze essay which I summarize why college student got flunk. I think I done a good job on that one. I find many evidence to support my point and the paper is not too short which most of my papers were.
     If I can change one thing about the course, I will be more interest in the class if you find more video or fun stuff about the subjects instead of just read the book. I found I  zoom out sometimes when you read direct from the book.
    If I was going back and take this course again, I will take more time working on my writting assignment. I pretty much did most of my paper at the last day or two before it was due. If I could finish it early, I can leave it aside for a little bit and come back to revise. Since I always did it in the last second, I have to revise right after I finish my draft which is not very efficient. 

Analyzing Bullshit

    The topic of this Penn & Teller's show is about recycling. They are arguing that recycle--which most of us believe is a good thing to do--is pointless. Wasting time, energy, and huge amount of money from our tax. They list the reasons that people believe why recycling is good and prove it wrong point by point. They point out that recycling wast more energy in the process than the overall saving. Second evidence, recycle waste about three times of money than simply throw it away. They also argue that the worker hired for recycle is wasting of the payers' tax money. Next, they indicate that some trees are planted for making paper, like we plant wheat for food. After that, they mention the pollution brought by the recycle was not saving the environment but rather destroy it. One last, they show that if we built a 35 mile wide land fill, it could hold our trash for 1000 years. It's not small but it is just a small part of United States. In addition, the methane producing from the trash can also  be a source for our electricity.

    I think that the evidences they provided are convincing. They not only show their point but also show the interview from the opposite point of view. They proof what we think is correct to do was wrong. Since they do it point by point, it is easy to follow. They did consider the need and desire for their audiences, However, it might make the people with opposite view point angry at the same time.  They build up their logos by providing the data and statistic. They also build up the pathos by interview the expert form both side. I did not see the ethos, unless the cursing could count as ethos.

    The strategies I might use to prove my point is provide  as many data and statistic as I can from both side. 

In Class Revising Activities

    As the inflation increasing, the banking industry introduced the automated teller machine (ATM) to respond. By making the money more available to average people, people can simply withdraw from ATM and buy the goods wither they can afford or not. Although ATM was pretty convenience, it also brought some negative effect to average individual. Instead of going to bank during the lunch time, as people used to be, some people went shopping. With a machine-vended money, they can spend even more than with a credit card. Also, since ATM is more convenience than withdraw money with the checkbook, people rarely keep track of their accounts. Another problem is that people who never dream to rob the bank try to trick the machine and got the "free money".  

Chapter 16 Question About The Writer's Craft # 2

WHY WE CRAVE HORROR MOVIES ,by Stephen King


    The compare with the roller coaster is show that most people have desire to show they are not afraid. The horror movies provide the violence view to satisfied the desire of the public lynchings  within people. Sick jokes is similar with horror movie as people might laugh at it even if the joke or the movie is not "right" for normal person.

  
 INNOCENTS AFIELD, by Buzz Bissinger

    The Bissinger used "million" and "just" repeatedly in paragraph three. He use those words to signal the nonexistent and the actual purchases of high school sports. The repetition is pretty effective, in my opinion. The "million" makes the point sounds dramatic and many "just" shows how many people think that the problem is not that important but in reality it is important.

BLACK MEN AND PUBLIC SPACE ,by Brent Staples

    The author opens the pieces with such a dramatic,yet intentionally misleading, narrative to provide a personal experience and how people automatically assume that black men are murder-to-be or danger stranger even though they are really not. At first, we assume he will mugging or do something bad to the white lady, turn out he was innocent and not want to harm her in any ways. The assumption we make according to the appearance might not be right. Just because he is black does not mean he is automatically bad. 

Chapter 15 page 373

Question about the writer's craft:


1. The author use point-by-point method to organize her essay. The reason that the author choose this method may because it is easier to follow. Instead of talking about the two different way separately, she compare both at same time.


2. I think Cohen is writing for indifferent audience. There are descriptions about the show and the time back to Victorian period. If this paper was for people who already agree with her, the audiences will know what she talking about. Thus the explanation won't be necessary. On the other hand, the paper is not strong enough to convince people who were disagree with her.


3.Cohen quote from the well known novelist Jane Austen ans Edith Warton in Victorian and Edwardian period..  She choose to quote instead of summarize because it shows the similarity and difference directly. In addition, most people already know the background in the book since they are really famous. The author don't necessary need to review it for the audience.

Chapter 13

Lutz p.292

#2: 

    The four questions, according to Lutz, that help people spot the doublespeak are: "Who is saying to whom, with what condition and circumstance, with what intent, ans with what result?" Asking those question would help us under what the author was really trying to said. Whether the speaker was try to hide some information or use irony.

#3:

    The term that Lutz use to describe the forth kinds of double speak is "inflated language".  Example: Chrysler "initiates a career alternative enhancement program"  which mean laying off workers.

First kind of double speak is "euphemism" which use positive word to avoid harsh reality.

Ex: "passed away" instead of dead.

Second kind of double speak is "jargon."  Professional language which make simple seems complex. Ex: "organoleptic analysis" for smelling

Third kind of double speak is "gobbledygook" or "bureaucratese" which overwhelming the audience with words

Ex: " It is a tricky problem to find the particular calibration in timing that would be appropriate to stem the acceleration in risk premiums creating be falling income without  prematurely aborting the decline in the inflation-generated risk premium."

Chapter 8, Activity 2

Simple :

    The parking lot at campus is usually a wide area. The visibility fade at night. You would not be able to identify thing in the dim light. Evildoer can hide behind a vehicle easily and nobody will be there to save you. The parking lot is dangerous at night.

Complex & Compound-Complex :

    The parking lot at campus is usually wide because of the large amount of students population in the college. As the night falling down, the visibility of most people fade. With the dim light in the area, you would not be able to identify what is going on at the dark. Since the lot is not limit to stuffs and students only, anybody could enter which means the evildoer might hide behind the vehicle without anyone notice. When the accident happen, nobody would be around to help because the park is usually desolate. Therefore, the parking space is a dangerous place at night.

The simple sentence is straight to the point , but the complex sentence is easier to provide detail. 

Chapter 7 Revising Activity3

• The point of view keep change from parents, children, and teacher.
• The thesis for this draft is not very clear for me. The thesis in this draft was one of suggestion for double-income family to reduce the risk for letting little kids stay at home alone. But it never mention other suggestion.
• Some support point is irrelevant or not true. 
• Longer school hours doesn't necessary increase the time for teacher to help. Instead, the kid might need to learn more and have even more questions. The parents still need to help their kid with homework.(Paragraph 2)
•  Longer school will increase the pressure for teacher not relieve . (in paragraph 4.)

 Revision:

The Extended School Day

    Imagine a seven-year-old girl home alone because her parents work till five every night. There are lots of thing could happen to her, whether she is good or not. Being curious could get her in trouble. Accidents could happen even though she did not do anything wrong. In the United States, there are lots of "latchkey" children like this girl. A way to deal with this problem could be the lengthen of school hours for elementary school.  
    The longer school hour allow the parents to concentrate on their job. Parents don't have to worry whether the kid is safe at home by themselves in the work time. The nervousness of letting kids home alone would be solve.  They can still help the kids with homework when arrived home. Extended school could also reduce the financial burden of hiring a home sitter. Having a sitter can increase the budget of family but not necessary solve the question. Parents still need to worry whether the person is reliable or not.
    It's a fact that many students dislike school, which is sad for education in this country. Even so,however, the longer school would benefit the children, too. Obviously, by the time the bus drop them off, one of the parents will be home waiting for them. Longer school hours also provide children opportunity to work on their weak subject. Furthermore, it gives students the chance to participate in extracurricular activities such as  join a science club, play on a softball team, sing in a school chorus, and take an art class.
      Finally, extended day would also benefit teacher. Longer work-hour increase the pressure and responsibility for teacher ,however, increase the wage at the same time. For the teacher who enjoy the times with his or her students, longer school hour also provide them more time with those lovely children. 
    Implementing an extended school day would be expensive, but, according to the benefit of it, I feel that many communities would be willing to finance the cost. The home alone young kids and double-income family need this extended school day now.

In class Activity

Thesis: Wining the lottery may not always be a blessing
Purpose: prevent teenager from false belief
Audience: teenager
Tone: convince
Point of view: Third person
Free write:

1. Wrong belief that there's no need to work hard
2. become shopaholic
3. Could not handle the life after spend all the lottery money.
4. Safety issue

    Wining the lottery is the dream of most people. Instant way to be rich, why not. However, it might not be a blessing. After wining the lottery, huge amount of money flow into account. "Why would I work hard? I can just buy some more lottery and win the money." The money make us lost our mind and create the wrong belief that hard working was not necessary for life. What are you gonna do with the money? Spend it, of course. Lots and lots of unnecessary stuffs are buying to fill in the house. Then a better, larger house will be the next thing in demand. However, the lottery prise is limited. You don't have unlimited money to spend. What if you spend it all and still want some more? You won't be satisfied with the normal life anymore like we used to. Furthermore, you will worry about your money. You suspect everybody want your money. You could not distinguish the people around you are friends or thief that want to steal the money. Your life might seems brighten at the moment you win the prise, but your life might be turn upside down after won the lottery. Therefore, wining the lottery might not be a blessing. 

In Class Revising Activity

    A car coming rapidly around the curve as I drove down the street. The car did not slow down as it headed toward the traffic light which turned yellow and then red. A young, model dressed couple started to cross the street. "Watch out!" the woman yelled to her husband. The man jumped onto shoulder immediately thus he was not hurt, however, the woman was. Running to a nearby emergency phone, I called the police. The ambulance arrived, but it was too late. The terrible looked driver failed the sobriety test . Furthermore, the police found out that driver had two offenses before. Apparently, the batter way to keep the drunk driver out of road need to be found.

In-Class Writing

    The article Of Two Mind Of Books is written by Matt Richtel and Claire Miller and published in New York Times. It's about a argument about what is the right way to read. Some people prefer to read from a "actual" book while someone enjoy to read from a  electronic device like ipad or laptop. The authors point out that Mrs. de Halleus "like the smell of the book and the feel of holding it," which is  one of the reason that people prefer old fashion paperback book. From a different point of view, e-book can be more convenience for some person. People can read the book directly on i-pod, e-reader, or other device. You can zoom in or out to the size you feel comfortable. 
    
    For me, how other people read is not that big of the issue. The thing that matter is the material in the book , not the media. I did not know that it could be such a big issue for some couple in real life. They can still read together just in different ways.